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My first commissioned TG Caption. Paid for by the ever awesome :iconkyoshira71:. I actually had a ton of fun with this one, especially how it ended up changing a man's life not by completely changing it, but by reaffirming what she was really after the whole time. Anyway, I really hoped you liked it as much as I had fun writing it.
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orangeglasses2 Featured By Owner Mar 28, 2015
She turned out pretty sexy!
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MattOnCola Featured By Owner Aug 28, 2014  Student Writer
Wonder where she is now o.o <.<
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Niosaki Featured By Owner Mar 14, 2014
loved it :)
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TF-Wizard Featured By Owner Mar 14, 2014
Thanks!
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Niosaki Featured By Owner Oct 9, 2015
your welcome :)
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jbh14 Featured By Owner Oct 30, 2013
Sammy's reaction is hilarious for some reason, great job!! xD
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TF-Wizard Featured By Owner Oct 30, 2013
I thanks! I had a lot of fun with this one.
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Jack-O-Lance Featured By Owner Oct 3, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Not bad, very interesting! I'm not a party goer, but more of a webworm!

(Webworm: Kind of like a bookworm but more of my face to a computer/phone screen instead of my face in a book, reading what's on the computer rather than what's in a book; although I would a book if it's interestung! ;P
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TF-Wizard Featured By Owner Oct 3, 2013
Sure.
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Jack-O-Lance Featured By Owner Oct 3, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:thumbsup:
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DavisWTG Featured By Owner Sep 12, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Finally getting to read through it again. Man, real life certainly has been busy. '^^
Anyways, while I've never been too much into parties, I do know persons that are sort of like Sam was described here, so it's not like such a situation is unfamiliar. Certainly an interesting conclusion after the change, though. The more things change...
Other than that, I'd say I liked it. The usual good descriptions plus the fact that it tells more of a story than, well, the average caption does.  I guess I really am almost always pointing out the same things, huh?
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TF-Wizard Featured By Owner Sep 12, 2013
No, you always bring something new to the conversation. This one was interesting to me, especially considering the TG wasn't the most important part of his character development.
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Dinomaster75 Featured By Owner Sep 8, 2013
Very interesting. I liked it. :)
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TF-Wizard Featured By Owner Sep 8, 2013
Thanks!
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Dinomaster75 Featured By Owner Sep 8, 2013
Your welcome.
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TF-Wizard Featured By Owner Sep 9, 2013
Glad to hear it.
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Rhys1010 Featured By Owner Sep 8, 2013
Oh what a man she was.
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TF-Wizard Featured By Owner Sep 8, 2013
Heh. I guess so? I'm not sure I understand the comment...
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Rhys1010 Featured By Owner Sep 8, 2013
Worked at being a party animal, got bored of it, studied and became better, went to a party that was supposed to be amazing, had one nice thing, and then went and studied some more.
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TF-Wizard Featured By Owner Sep 8, 2013
Ah, well this cap must be very interesting for you then.
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Rhys1010 Featured By Owner Sep 8, 2013
Indeed. And the pic isn't half bad either.
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TF-Wizard Featured By Owner Sep 8, 2013
Thanks, wish I could say I made it...or found it.
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YurixTheWanderer Featured By Owner Sep 8, 2013  Hobbyist Artist
To be honest, I can relate to Sam's case. I wasn't a party animal, but with harsh past experiences and the same negative setbacks and comments, it pretty much made me jaded of a lot of things.

I'm not sure what to think of the story. I mean, it's well-made, but... I can't shake the feeling that things somehow ended... badly.
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TF-Wizard Featured By Owner Sep 8, 2013
Yeah, this one's open to interpretation, and the ending is ambiguously happy. That made it a fun one for me. I mean, she's said to be happy, but also incredibly jaded and bitter. Either way, thanks for your feedback.
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unit1138 Featured By Owner Sep 7, 2013  Hobbyist
I really hate it when the eyes are on a layer higher than the hair.  But I suppose you'd rather I critique the story not the picture.  That was an excellent cap, a little redundant in the first and last paragraphs but I think that was the point.  It was long, but it payed off with some solid character progression, exactly what I want in a longer cap.  And any caption that makes me look up a word (burgeon) is basically guaranteed to be excellent.
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TF-Wizard Featured By Owner Sep 8, 2013
Thanks. I'm very glad to see you're impressed, and you're right about the redundant nature of the first and last paragraphs. Although when it's purposeful I suppose you call it repetition...oh well.
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unit1138 Featured By Owner Sep 8, 2013  Hobbyist
Ah yes that does have a much nicer connotation.
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TF-Wizard Featured By Owner Sep 8, 2013
I think it's the literary term for such a thing actually. I always enjoy it when stories loop back to the beginning in some fashion, so I incorporate that into a lot of my captions.
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kyoshira71 Featured By Owner Sep 7, 2013
Awesome, simply awesome. Thanks so much for this cap. I loved the story, the small details, and the way it ended. You really did an amazing job, I loved the creative approach you took to the pic. Just thanks...this was just...wow.
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TF-Wizard Featured By Owner Sep 7, 2013
Thanks, I'm um, not very good at taking praise. What I can say however, is that I'm very happy you liked it. I was honestly a bit worried you wouldn't! Hearing that praise makes me more than a bit happy inside. Thanks for giving me the opportunity to write this story. I'm just glad you enjoyed reading it as much as I enjoyed writing it!
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kyoshira71 Featured By Owner Sep 7, 2013
I would have to be crazy to have not liked this cap.
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TF-Wizard Featured By Owner Sep 8, 2013
Thanks for the compliment.
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kyoshira71 Featured By Owner Sep 7, 2013
Some of the small things that really made this cap for me were things like the following:
-I liked the fact that Sam couldn't remember the person's name, that is how much he partied.
-I also like the fact that the guy's plans were ruined by the way Sammy reacted after the change.
-The way you described that glimpse of joy people could see from her as she read and wrote things. It reminded me of the way   that I can sometimes be sucked into my cap making and reading.
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TF-Wizard Featured By Owner Sep 8, 2013
Thanks those are all elements that I loved thinking of and writing.
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